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Re: Two Spirits, One goal[accepting]
Dmitri: I follow closely behind Arwen. She's cerainly fast, but I wonder if she can keep up this pace. I trip over my own feet, as I've done before, but ...
Oct 3, 2011 -
Re: Two Spirits, One goal[accepting]
Dmitri: I stop as we reach where I saw the wolf. Arwen almost runs into me, but stops herself just in time. There's two girls in the street talking in ...
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: You are being watched. *started/SRopen*
Chance: Togethers: I stared at the mini-wolf-thing and wondered what I was supposed to do with it. It had woken up when the girl set it down and was now ...
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: Two Spirits, One goal[accepting]
Dmitri: I'm doing all the wrong things. Arwen must think I'm stupid by now. Normally I can think faster with this. "C'mon, I think we should try find this wolf," ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: You are being watched. *started/SRopen*
Chance: Togethers: I watch the boy start to make the fire, too surprised to offer to help. Finally, I find my voice. "You're doing it wrong," I say. "Really?" he ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: Candy Kiss
There are some grammar and spelling mistakes that were kinda distracting to the poem. I don't think glisted is a word. It's a pretty good poem, though. I like poems ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: Hunted ch. 20
In the middle of the night I wake up, but my legs don't. I tense, wondering what woke me. I hear an owl in a tree going "Hoo, hoo." I ...
Oct 1, 2011 -
Re: You are being watched. *started/SRopen*
Chance: Togethers: I watch the boy start to make the fire, too surprised to offer. Finally, I find my voice. "You're doing it wrong," I say. "Really?" he says, "Do ...
Sep 28, 2011 -
Re: Two Spirits, One goal[accepting]
Dmitri: "How would I know where the wolf is?" I say, "I was trying to get away from it, not follow it wherever it goes," I say to Arwen. I ...
Sep 27, 2011 -
Re: Finger in the Dust
I didn't completely understand it either, but it was definitely deep and had a strong feel to it. I didn't see any grammatical or spelling errors! I agree with Zone ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: Random Story Theme Contest Entry
I like the piece a lot, it has an eery, whimsical yet melancholy kind of feel to it, it kinda reminds me of Stargirl. I didn't notice any grammatical or ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: The Road
"Your self" should be yourself. It could have a little more flow. Those are the only things I see wrong with it though. I like the imagery and the meaning. ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: just cold
I like this a lot, it's mysterious and leaves you with questions and wondering. I love that. It leaves a lot to the imagination and lets the reader's imagination have ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: Last Journey Home
Welcome to YWS!! Wow. The main thing you want a poem, or any story really, to do, is to move you and make you feel something. This piece definitely moved ...
Sep 25, 2011 -
Re: The ongoing Adventures of Bib Fickle
I liked this a lot. It made me laugh. It seems like something my friend Savannah would say, but then it also kinda reminds me of The Hitchhiker's Guide to ...
Sep 25, 2011
