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Name: Angeline Gender: Female Appearance: Porcelain doll with rosy cheeks, dark hair in ringlets and dark blue eyes. She wears a light blue dress and a lace bonnet. History: Angeline ...

Tesla watched the lizards, trying to figure out if they were organized in any way. If they were, she probably could've found some way to get through; some chink in ...

Hi, I like the poem a lot, is has really good imagery, but I think you need to work on the pace of the poem a bit. There were a ...

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Tesla gained consciousness, coughing. Her throat burned and she was covered with dust. She tried to wipe some of the ash from her eyes, but her arms were just as ...

Tesla stayed in John's tent as he went to the get the guns, came back, left again, and came back with ammunition. Tesla was pretty sure he didn't notice she ...

This chapter made me laugh. I have trouble with those sleeping bag bag-things too. You have done an excellent job at showing not telling, something I have trouble with. You've ...

Tesla nodded, "I can do that. I'll be back in an hour." "Okay," John said. She left the tent silently and drifted around the camp, looking to anyone else like ...

You should put that it gets darker or something, because it goes from it being noon to them looking for a place to stop pretty quickly. Again, short chapter, love ...

It feels a little rushed at some parts because of some grammer mistakes. If you looked over your work though, it could be very nice. I agree with Ajt that ...

Tesla shrugged. "We could go to a nearby island. We'd be able to sneak back whenever we wanted to; it's really not that well defended and like your friend says, ...

"Great," I say, "I like a challenge. Count me in. It sounds like the first thing we'll need is people, and your sign doesn't seem to be doing anything for ...

When John doesn't answer, Tesla raises an eyebrow. "Is there anyone else? Or is it just the two of us? And are we supplied at all, because I don't have ...