telle_04

hello.. well, i'm new here at yws, so i was just checking things out.. your story was nice and confusing at the same time. i love it how you describe ...

he had been the envy of all the young mothers around. So quiet, they said to his mother. Raising him must be a breeze. As long as his memory could ...

Falling on my knees in worship Giving all I am to seek your face Lord all I am is yours My whole life I place in your hands God of ...

You are the light That guides my way through fear I know my path Will lead me to the King And all the world Will bow to worship You You ...

*** This is my prayer in the desert And all that's within me feels dry This is my prayer in the hunger in me My God is a God who ...

hello, listeningforthemuse.. And I’ve lied to myself everyday you don't have to lie to yourself. so what if he does not love you?..there's a lot of other people out there ...

hello nariel.. you said there were some supernatural elements here.. well i don't have to ask. but i was just curious when i read the prologue. and you dont have ...

hello matt.. so, what exactly is this story about?..a typical teen that loves to write, except novels? since it's still a prologue, i don't understand much about it but i ...

Her heart was going a million miles a minute, racing and pounding silently. She couldn’t see anything but the darkness of the forest. She was running faster than she ever ...

How old had I been, when I was ripped from the arms of my mother? Mortal was I, but only half, and the demon blood lay dormant. In ignorance they ...

hello again.. i'm really enjoying this story.. i love your style, hiding the girl's identity..i think it will be so hard to address someone like, "the girl", but still her ...

hello... wow..very nice. wordy, though, but i've mentioned that i love wordy stories. i love how you describe the forest, the eerie place, and especially the girl. the girl (is ...

Blair awoke the next morning to the birds chirping over head. She crawled out of her tree and placed her fists in the small of back until it popped. She ...

The air was cold and muggy. Everytime she took a breath it felt stiff and thick. The rain fell down around her making her midnight black hair sodden and lifeless. ...

Answers I am after: 1. Does this make you want to read more? 2. Is there anything I could make better? 3. Is it too wordy? 4. Is there anything ...