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Hey Chakita1 Well, I must say that it is a great idea, of course you always come up with unusually sad ideas to write. Admit it. So Green told me ...

I like this version of your story better. I found out the relationship with her father, which makes much more sense as to why she mourns him. It's like, now ...

I breathed in the distinct smell of Mexico. It smelled like wet dirt and the air was unbearably muggy. I looked at the clouded sky, noticing the advancing darkness; it ...

i am confused and you know it. Otherwise, i like your metaphors. Very girly!! :roll:

This is a very good story. I like it a lot. I especially like the way in which you write the dialouge very fitting to the era the story takes ...

i liked it but i'm very confused by this Duke person. Very good though.

I like this story. I can never guess what is going to happen next. I don't have anything really to critisize. This chapter seemed very simple, like a passover chapter. ...

thanks you guys, i really appreciate the time you took to look over my story. Thanks for the help. :smt003

“Oh, man. You should have been there. It sounded freaking amazing. Humboldt doesn’t compare at all.” said Hope, my best friend. I was walking with my two best friends, Hope ...

in the beginning you had a little problem with point of view. you were referring to the character as 'me' or 'i' then referred to her as she? i would ...

ohhh, now i know what confused me. never mind on the fourth chapter. i think i read that one first.

:D love it, i like the way you write. it does seem like it's not the 21st century but a much older one. It did confuse me that you skipped ...