tallulah12

Thanks I've edited the paragraphs now to make it easier to read - if you don't have time to read it now don't worry :)

I am currently writing a novel I hope to publish, so far I have written roughly 120,000 words, this is an extract – I am actually a little nervous about ...

Are secret's are sins = “our secrets are sins” This is a great poem, "we" gives a very united feel, and I like how the issue of the poem isn't ...

First of all, when I saw your age I was extremely surprised - your writing is much more advanced than a fourteen year old The sentence about the ground being ...

"my mother" do you mean "her mother"? the writing is third person so this sudden shift to first is confusing also "keck" should be "neck" love the hair as seaweed ...

Very nice story mostly because it was concise and straight to the point, several writers tend to make sentences too wordy and confusing. Your story was short and engaging, so ...

‘I once believed that a thousand biographies would be written, with me as their subject. But the biographies in libraries are only written about the good men. The men who ...

‘She let her pencil fall across the page. Charlotte concentrated as she began…’ I would switch ‘she’ and ‘Charlotte’ around, so we know the character’s name straight away. When I ...