talkingbird

That was incredible. Wow. Just a few things, though: I would reword the part about The back porches for smoking, it seems a little out of place. And also the ...

Of course! It's about a girl, who's been "broken", she feels sad and lost and is actually supposed to have a bunch of other issues, but I didn't really want ...

Thank you! I took out the small font, but I'm still trying to figure out how to explain 'this' without it disrupting the flow, as it would seem really intense ...

I would love any type of feedback. I know i need it... it's very rough, seeing as i wrote it at 4am :) Not sure why I rated it, though... ...

O________________O That is my face. Because... oh my god.... these are so good. KEEP ON WRITING

Ok, I'm commenting on all of your work :) but you're just REALLY good. And just wondering, have you read wintergirls? This reminds me a lot of the book... I'm ...

That was SO good. Oh my god, I could feel the excitement and nervous energy and blind, jittery happiness. Wow. It flowed reallyyyy well. I loved the part that goes ...

I personally like the lack of formality (though some things could be fixed... which is mentioned above). I feel like it stylistically adds to the tone, which by the way ...

Enjoy... Snow claws at the world While these nesting dolls with porcelain dreams wish to be somewhere else, wish to escape, wish to let the sticky disappointing leak out wish ...

A poem I wrote last winter... I haven't looked at it in a while so I needs some work... A poem about poor self esteem and body image: Rare flowers ...

About an ED unit a hospital... Here, we are not people, We are not our inaudible screams and tears too transparent to see. Not even murky puddles of mistakes and ...

A poem I wrote in the hospital. Basically describes what I was feeling... We threw away our makeup because it no longer worked, For thick acrylic paint So we could ...

The voice is very believable! Like, as I was reading this I definitely got the feeling of the character. But in the beginning I didn't realize that he was ben ...

thank you so much! and yeah i'll fix the punctuation soon...

What’s Forgotten (This is REALLY rough) One by one Your neighbors, Your classmates, Your friends, Your family, And the people who never saw you there Buckle their seat belts And ...