sylverdawn

Really good keep going, I'll post a review shortly.

storybook : This time I'm going with more of a sci-fi theme. In the not too distant future VR (virtual reality) is all the rage. An experimental system allows people ...

Good job just one issue in general, It was difficult to read since you condensed it all into one paragraph you should do a little spacing.

An interesting prologue, it brings up ideas about times that have passed, I'll definitely read the story, although rather then just telling it like a fairy tale maybe you should ...

Well done, I'm curious to see what happens next. Amelia seems like a good main character, although a bit insecure, I get the feeling if you dig hard enough you'll ...

Very well done, I can honestly say that I'll keep reading the story. I especially like how you have his capture and then flash back in the dream to explain ...

The first day of classes was really well done. I enjoyed how you made the personalities of the three different teachers clash. Lokskrip for example seems like the type who ...

You've done a really good job portraying the academy and you did a good job just dropping the rules here and there rather then info dumping. The academy was described ...

I really liked how make it flow from one point to the next, the battle helped get things going at a nice pace. I'm a bit confused about the magic ...

*I'm warning you guys ahead of time. I'll probably be offline from the 29th to the 13th. I'm going to a creative writing camp in Toronto.* Kristen: aka- Azrayel Signing ...

*Sorry if it's long.* Azrayel- Ray crossed the desert quickly, war was coming to the kingdoms, and when it started the nomadic tribes, would no doubt move inland. Into the ...

*From now on if you see a completely capitilized word that means its one of Ray's compulsions.* Azrayel- Ray shifted inside the tent, studying the night sky through an open ...

*Sorry I havn't posted in a while, I've been cramming for exams, curse them. On the up side my laptops gettng repaired so I should be able to post more ...

Azrayel- Ray watched the exchange carefully. His unique purple eyes kindling with a dangerous inner fire. Cassually he took off his cloak and sat in a chair. The pair of ...

*Yoru is different from other dragons, rather then breathe fire he breathes Ice. If that's all right.* Azrayel- Ray watched the horizon of the desert, as they flew over it. ...