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Name: Ravel Melnared (Rav for short) Age: 19 Gender: male Race: elf Rank: Prince of Melnar, adopted (he's not in the line of succesion) Alligence: Melnar Appearance: Tall, pale, and ...

*I would like to take the place of a General/high ranking officer in Niran's army. Will post profile shortly if that is all right. Or if it's at all possible ...

Outcast story : In the savannah islands survival of the fittest is law. If you can't contribute to your village's survival then you will be cast out into the desert ...

Well done, you give just enough hints about a mysterious world of magic to draw the reader in. The dynamic between the girl and the man is well portrayed, but ...

Excellent beginning, I normally don't enjoy stories with religious overtones but this one was handled very well. I especially enjoyed the dynamics among the four friends. One thing that could ...

An excellent beginning, it really pulled me into the story. You should describe the people more though, the only one you really did describe was Puck. Maybe you could have ...

Brilliant, you start off with just the right amount of suspense. When people write these kinds of scenes the character often comes off as stupid, she doesn't just pissed off. ...

A solid beginning and an excellent draw. The beginning and end were a little sudden though, maybe you could start from just before she collapses. Get a better idea of ...

I like this piece, it has a lot of potential for a good story. There were a few things you could improve on though. One is that the story is ...

Very good prologue, it's definetly worth continueing. I like how you portray the vampire, the wings are a very nice touch. One thing is that there isn't enough information before ...

An exellent prologue. It pulls you in, and gets you hooked. I like the fact that Gullen made a mistake. Mages and mysterious organizations are normally to be all knowing ...

*Since it's been up for so long, I guess we can start, if anyone wants they can join as the story progresses.* Raven- A song played gently in the background, ...

Elemental Cycle: Volume 1- Fireborn See below for chapters 1-6. I will continue to post the novel in it's entirety on this thread.

*So we have two descendents of Jack the Ripper? ? ?*

*Since this story has been up for a few days, once one or two more profiles are up we'll start, people can join as we go along.*