sylverdawn

Squall tossed the coin across the room to Kyles, before crouching down by her daemon, carefully she began running her hands over him. Checking to see if there were any ...

"Which question you want me to answer first? Hers or yours?" She kept talking without waiting for an answer. Putting her hand to the boys chest, she smiled at him. ...

Overall this is a good story. The spelling and grammar mistakes were a bit of a hassle but its still readable. I agree with what a lot of people said ...

Wind had gotten in the house through an open window in the roof, now he crouched in the rafters ready to pounce the instant Squall made her move. He studied ...

ok can I pls join in? I'll post my thing an' if I can't you don't have to thread it into the story. name: Squall age: 16 gender: female daemon's ...

Also if you spell Vampyr like this in story maybe you should spell Vampire bat like that. i'm enjoying this story but i have to disagree with this point, vampire ...

i'm doing spelling and puncuation after the story is finished, and its just these first three parts that are so long, the parts will be shorter from this point on.

k, from this point on I've loaded all the stuff I've written already, i'll load the rest as it comes, so it'll be at a slower pace. Questions continue to ...

right let me clear that stuff up for you, cause some of this remains confusing till deep in the book, first Rath/Sora are best friends but they're the reincarnation of ...

Chapter 1: Fate Comes to Call- The first thing Rath noticed when he came to, was that all his senses were sharper, as if a curtain had been ripped away ...

Okay, this is may first ime submitting so don't be too harsh. Also in your critique please don't correct puntuation :evil: , I'll do that later. :roll: Tell me if ...

thnx guys! i apreciate the support. I'm into fiction. mostly fantsy. But I like a lot of other stuff 2. :mrgreen:

:D I really enjoyed the story it has a strong flow with good ideas. I believe the prolouge is meant to ensnare the reader and set a foundation for the ...

i liked it but a couple times it seemed like u were changing from present to past??? it was a little confusing but i enjoyed it alot, I agree with ...

good story, but I don't think theres enough background. Too many unanwsered questions. also, i think the names are not creative enough. (a sorcerer named John?!) otherwise though it seems ...