sylverdawn

alright here's the link for the discussion thread.

alright this is the same set up as the other ones. sylverdawn- Seda, he is 16, the reincarnation of Khylaris one of the three youngest, (the oldest triplet). Can manipulate ...

April 2008: Seda- Seda pulled up on the side of the road for a moment, below he could see the city of Phoenix. He'd left the last city he had ...

*I'll be evil and open with the bad guy* somewhere in Phoenix. October 31, 2007- The man was tired, he had been up for the last three nights with the ...

*alright first, if your character is an angel, this is a fight the gods want to stay out of. So if you get involved make sure it is entirely by ...

name- Seda age- 16 gender- male race- demon, royal sibling appearance- /but the hair is black with a blue sheen, and the eyes are like all demons, golden. personality- stubborn, ...

plot : Since the beginning of time the race of demons has walked beside man. They live among us, yet abide by their own society and laws. The only way ...

I don't really get whats going on. But it's a prologue so that doesn't matter, I'm sure I'll get more answers as the story progresses. I think you did a ...

Overall it sounds really interesting, but I think you should space your paragraphs more. The way it is now made it difficult to follow.

*alright, when do they get ambushed?* Seiya- Seiya leaped for the fridge and grabbed the meat. She made a quick ham sandwich and had a glass of milk before going ...

Seiya- "Well personally I'm for going to Tobi's house. We shouldn't stay there long, but we van still grab food, money, and anything else we might need." Without thinking Seiya ...

Seiya- Sunlight pierced her eyelids as Seiya jerked awake. She lifted her hands to shade her eyes, only then realizing that she was a person again. Then everything came rushing ...

*yeah sounds good* Seiya- Seiya ran, she didn't know where they were going. She just kept running, following the others, instinct screaming at her to get far far away from ...

*a question, how are they going to find out about their other powers?*

Seiya- Seiya watched as one by one the others all slowly came too. It was interesting to see eveyone's reactions to turning into animals.The emotions ran the gammit from shock ...