sylverdawn

Nice. It seems like an interesting prologue but you should try to clear a few things up. For one why is such an important job given to a sixteen year ...

Seda- He stood in a ring of blue fire, another boy stood across from him. A few years older, but they looked exactly alike. He wore clothes from ancient times, ...

all right, i guess that's okay, or maybe we can have it that once enough of them get together that triggers the memories.

*sure Maki-chan, you can join. Basically right now everyone is going to meet up and when that happens it will trigger the Royal's memories allowing them to recall their past ...

Hayate- His head was pounding. Hayate shook out his black hair while he pulled on his coat. Since he was no longer in the pack he had to make his ...

it seems like a great prologue but it leaves a lot of questions, who are the boys? how did one of them get so badly hurt? What's the voice in ...

it's very interesting, but the descriptions seem a bit too detailed, and their should be more emphasis on the letter. I mean, they way it's written, it's something from blood ...

it sounds like a really interesting story, it feels like the kind of plot to draw you in. I would suggest portraying their emotions more, don't worry that's a problem ...

name- Hayate Okami age- 17 race- werewolf appearance- Human Form- , he has small black wolf ears on his head (like inuyasha) Wolf Form- history- Keri's brother (this okay?), the ...

*how about we all meet at the cafe? makes it easier.* Seda- He dug into his sandwich, before taking a gulp of coke and surveying the room. There was a ...

why doesn't everyone show up at the cafe or something???

*to answer the question about possession, it's an ability that some demon's have, but most lack. The whole 'behind every legend, there is a grain of truth' thing.*

*I know, I fixed that.* "No particular reason. You just looked like you were in trouble. Besides I was heading the same way as you. And I saw how everyone ...

*how about when all the siblings meet up, that triggers their memories.* Seda- His arms came up and he steadied the girl before he fell over. "Hey, you alright." She ...

*one thing, the human race doesn't know about demons, unless they have a strong sixth sense.* Seda- The sun had set and the city was just beginning to come alive. ...