syd552

it's too short and i am not a good critque but, i think you should extend it...

it was really great, i almost cried *sniffles =D good job, keep on writing

"As you stumble into the night." it was good, but just one thing, i feel that you dont need this line ,"As you stumble into the night." on the 1st ...

i got really confused from the start it doestn make sense to me and your pattern is way off sooo..... yeah

i cant rreally construct very much cause this was really good but at the end you should add 2 more lines to go along with the rythm of the poem ...

to find out who he was inside so she...

Do you know how many people died on battle field ground, fought for independence saw the dead bodies that were found. Do you know what time they wake up? go ...

yeah! first to review, anyway i like this it has a few ryming mistakes in it but its still good keep it up

sorry, in that quote i think you meant , your instead of you and i agree with the person abouve me, this isnt a poem its a diary entry and ...

[quote="EmmaSweetie100"] You eyes sparkled quote]

hey this is really good lyrics i cant eally figure out how it would sound to a beat though so yeah i think its kinda long but really good and ...

That was stupid and didnt make any sense carly would never date freddie, we all know the characters acted like totally different poeple and yeah i didnt understand it was ...

Singing in the shower is one of Autumn Johnson's many talents. She also sings out of the shower and plays on the school softball and basketball team. Nevertheless she's a ...

Personally, i dont like reading the swears. And to stick up for some people who do swear in their stories, it doesnt mean that they swear. It just means that ...

I think that you should retitle this, surviving middle school. Because your 11 and in middle school, like me and this sounds more like something that would happen in middle ...