sworddance

You're supposed to not know what she's talking about with the horse :twisted: muhahahahaahaaaaa.... *ahem* thanks for reviewing =D I appreciate it. I'll have a look at your work, too, ...

Ok, baroness, to further your torture and give you more creepy images to follow you around, I'm posting the next section! :twisted: Katie continued to take rides with Cloasia during ...

Oh yeah, I looked at this- I have a really bad habit of reading things but not posting a reply, and realizing it quite some time later... :oops: sorry about ...

Rofl dang it! me and my long sentences! I'll have you know, however, that I once found a sentence that was over a page in length, with exact grammatical correctness ...

noiiiiiiiice...... A couple typos: "but when you lease expected it" -->least "ever single" -->every Other than that, I love this. I think many of us can relate to this situation- ...

Ack, sorry, I almost forgot again. Here's the next part, just for you, chocoholic ;) Continuing to hold the door, I leaned against its frame and watched her go, angling ...

I'm here finally! Sorry that took so long. hmmm let us see; for starters, this is really good. That may not be at all useful to you, but I just ...

*stunned silence* well, that was disturbing... Unfortunately for your sanity, baroness, the name Cloasia must stay. The history behind the creation of this story is a wee bit complicated and ...

Ack- my name! *whips around, nearly decapitating whoever is standing closest to her* First of all, I feel I must caution you- and Snoink, but mostly you because it pertains ...

*applause* I noticed you implemented many of the changes- the punctuation, for one, is much better, though there are a few trouble spots. You still have a few info dumps, ...

There is no such thing as reading too much Tolkien. Ever. =P ~sworddance

Hi :D You may remember me popping into this thread for a brief rant to skell about getting my hopes up, but I never did give you an actual crit. ...

And the plot develops further.... *grin* hiya, chocoholic. I read the other, but I noticed this one had no crits yet and the other did, so I thought I'd just ...

Ah, sheka , I'm supposed to be elsewhere critiquing a different piece, but this caught my attention and held it. Darn you. >.< This is really good, to start off. ...

Hey chocoholic :D I like you already, just by your username hehehehe anyways, welcome! what genre do you write in usually? If it's fantasy, you may hear from me, b/c ...