sworddance

sweeeeet.... I'll look forward to seeing your story posts. If you need something to review first, though, go ahead and take a look at mine. It's called Ace of Threes, ...

I promise I will come back to this and critique soon- right now I'm rapidly running out of time to do my Spanish homework. *must restrain, must restrain...* for now ...

Thanks for the review, guys. Trident, a good suggestion, but I think it would detract from the original aim of the story, just be a distraction. Here's the next section; ...

hehe, likewise with Alaska. I mean, it's kinda hard to imagine a non-industrialized state where the main source of state revenue is OIL. So, what kind of things do you ...

Hmmm... I see what you mean about fifteen minutes thing. The reason I phrased it the way I did was because if I said she arrived in fifteen minutes, it ...

hey- glad to see I was useful :D I like this part; your main character is human *gasp* not a psychotic killer! ...meet one of the reasons why I don't ...

rofl welcome! I'm a newbie too. Don't worry, if you don't crack any jokes about me riding dog sleds to school I won't make any about you riding horses to ...

(splits in this story will be a bit weird; I didn't arrange it with posting in mind, so I'm just dividing it however I think works.) Ace of Threes Some ...

Hmmm, stories of modern warfare. I don't work with these often, but this one caught my interest. The style, with the short, choppy sentences, is intriguing; it gives it a ...

WHOA- I happened to be bored and clicked here, JC- you're from Alaska?? So am I!!!! I wonder if we're anywhere near each other...... you should pm me- are you ...

Oh my, a story with only one critique? Oh, this won't do.... *wicked grin* I shall wield the mighty red pen with gratuitous and relentless impunity -figuratively, of course, since ...

Hello fellow newbie! I just joined too, a couple days ago. I used to be into Warhammer also, coincidentally :D It isn't just a male thing! Although admittedly, my brothers ...

One word: AMAZING. I just hunted down and read through the whole story, which ate up...oh, about an hour and a half. And I'll tell you, it was a frantic ...

Hey Azure; I think I can help you out here with the problems the other two raised, and give you a bit of standard conventions editing also. first of all, ...

Ah, hey, thanks for the tip. If I ever get around to posting that story I'll put it there. What's the fantasy fools usergroup? much love, sib, and thanks :D