sunxkissedxme

Hi there! Like a few people have already mentioned, stopping at the end of each sentence can be quite annoying and confusing to the reader, so try to avoid it ...

Wow...this was really good. I loved the descriptive words and phrases you used to make the imagry in your piece very realistic. I really liked it, and it made me ...

thanks lexi!(:

This is amazing, I have tears in my eyes haha. After I finished I spent about five minutes just staring at the screen in awe. You used beautful imagry and ...

This was very sad, but brilliant just the same. I agree with the stanzas, but otherwise this was beautifully written. Great job! Keep writing!(:

thanks guys! And yes, i do agree that the rhyming is a bit, shall we say, awful. I don't usually rhyme in my poetry, but I though I'd try it ...

thanks!

thanks Ignatius5453, I tohught it seemed a bit off, but it was something I felt like I wanted to add, I'll try to get it to flow better. :)

haha it's okay, my thanks :) posted like 9 times for some reason...haha and thanks!

I love this so much! I can tell just by reading this that you are gonig to be a great daddy one day! I have absolutely nothing bad to say ...

I hate emo poetry! If it deserves the title "poetry". I don't really like the title "Emo" because most of my work is darker pieces, but mine are meant to ...

thanks guys! I'll work on it! I seem to be better at putting emotion in sadder/darker potery for some reason. Oh well :)

I soar up, legs outstretched, wind whipping thorugh my body. I plummet down, legs tucked, paralyzed with fear and anticipation. I close my eyes, and feel the breeze. Its cold ...

I absolutely loved this! You really don't need to change it, it's awesome the way it is! One minor thing though, like kafkaescense said, the line, "shadows pass me by", ...

I loved this! I thought it was really well put together and I liked the rhymes and there was nice imagrey. I think it flowed nicely and I just really ...