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Re: This is what you'll never see...
My body is covered in the pain I've had to endure. But my soul carries so much more then you'll ever see. Shredded and torn beyond fixation, my tattered soul ...
Dec 18, 2011 -
Re: Fakebook- Introduction
Hiya, I'm here, as requested :) This is a very good start, I think. Obviously there are some mistakes you need to go backand review, as theotherone and murtuza have ...
Dec 18, 2011 -
Re: Leave me broken hearted, by the sideline, wondering why.
It all started it sixth grade, we became the best of friends. You were the one I'd always go to, Even back then I loved you. Then we grew apart, ...
Oct 4, 2011 -
Re: Rather lie here and cry.
Hai there I did enjoy this, and I can really relate to it, which is always a great compliment for any literary work. There are a few mistakes though, that ...
Oct 4, 2011 -
Re: I Wanted to Change My Name
Hai there! I really liked your poem. It was very well written and I loved loved loved the idea. It flowed very well and it kept my attention throught the ...
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: I'll Wait for You
Hai there :D So first off, I'd like to say I enjoyed this for the most part. It had a great idea, although I think I should point a few ...
Oct 2, 2011 -
Re: Forget Me Not(prologue)
At first I thought I'd imagined it. The flash of anger, the blur coming at me from the corner of my eye. The sting where his open hand collided with ...
Sep 29, 2011 -
Re: Mind Games
I really liked how you conveyed the wars that everyone has in their minds. I usually do not like rhyming poetry but you did a good job with it here. ...
Aug 7, 2011 -
Re: the dance of death
thanks(:
Jul 14, 2011 -
Re: I walk alone
thanks, and I actaully hadn't thought about the greenday similarities, but you're right. I'm glad you liked it!(:
Jul 10, 2011 -
Re: I walk alone
thanks(: I have more work similar to this in my portfolio if you'd like to take a look.
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: I walk alone
I walk through the abandoned streets of a sleeping city, it's dark grime coating me, and seeping through my skin. I walk through the storm of others tears, Clouds of ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: Ballad of a twisted mind. :)
Hi there! First off, I really liked this, it was very deep and, of course, twisted, but you didn't over do it and it is very well written. I usually ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: Rose Petal Liquid
Hi there! I really enjoyed this, it was very well written and the emotion was clear throughout the whole thing. This is a bit nit-picky, but I couldn't find anything ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: Lies.
Hi there! I really enjoyed this, but the flow was a bit choppy in places. If you go back and put some puntuation in a few places it will read ...
Jul 8, 2011
