summergrl13

Nice work but I think it needs to be few lines longer to soak in the whole feeling of the meaning.

It souns really panicked and hurried trough the story. You need to lengthen it and add more details or it doesn't sound very poetic. Nice idea though. 0(o.o)0.

I love this! It's just beautiful how it flows and its rhythm is fantastic! It'd be a sin to not show this to your mom! No chatspeak, please. ~ Snoink.

Yeah! This is an awesome little poem!

Okay, this is chapter 2 and it follows Dylan's perspective now: As Dylan left for Algebra, his soul seemed to feel lighter than it had all morning. When he arrived ...

Very descriptive and in so, it's rather strong but that makes it very elegant. I really enjoyed this peice. Keep up the awesome work!!!

I enjoyed it but I thought that it was a little too heavy and too dark (obviously it's supposed to be dark and heavy but it's a little too much). ...

It's a fun little poem but that's just it; it's little and too short for me.

Interesting. I like how unique it is but I think you can write more.

I want to take up my thoughts of you and throw them in a fire to watch them slowly burn. I want to rip out your heart, tear it slowly ...

I like it! It's unique.=D.

I really don't like how often it swears. You should use less because that's really heavy swearing. Other than that it's great.

I love it!! I'm not an emotional person and I felt tears well up in my eyes!!

Hi;D!! This is the first chapter of my new teen romance book. It's called "Nothing's Fair in Teenage Love and War" and it'll switch between Alicia's and Dylan's perspectives. So ...