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I finally got to the third part. I loved it. It was your best so far and i think your chapters after this are going to become progressivley better. Quote: ...

This is a little confusing to read. If you put a whole line in between paragraphs it would be a lor more pleasing to the eye. Also the stuff i ...

I am not very good at the rhyming part of poetry but i have many ideas i would like put into poetry. PLEASE COMMENT The Fields of Indiana The feilds ...

I have no idea where you got this idea, but it was really "weird". The part about them having hot steamy sex in the closet either i missed something(they are ...

This was a really good start. Quote: "Her eyes began to loose their color, fleshy pockets settled themselves under her lashes." This didn't flow for me. It didn't sound right. ...

Death Showers This is an issue i feel strongly about even though it isn't a huge issue. Thanks to the band System of a Down i have decided to do ...

I really liked this poem thing. I am a star wars fan and i have a few of the new jedi order books. Quote: Three men,Three different Lives. Two Jedi,one ...

here is chapter two edited hope you like it Chapter 2 The Meeting When Rone woke up he couldn’t remember anything except he had a pain in his ankle and ...

this is my 11th chapter it is pretty small but i think it is a good one PLEASE COMMENT :!: Chapter 11 The Cursed Spell Sendoma had been up for ...

here is the tenth chapter tell me what you think Garak so far COMMENT PLEASE :!: Chapter 10 Egamulla Eniah Sendoma woke up and walked out to the main hall ...

here is my ninth chapter ithink the diologue in the beginning is a little bit...not right PLEASE COMMENT :!: Chapter 9 That Was Easy After the leaving the company of ...

I introduce a new character in this one and i would appreciate a character impression on her PLEASE COMMENT Chapter 8 Ihsanak Anso Sendoma woke up with a disgusting taste ...

This is my 7th chapter i am relly pleased with where this book is headed PLEASE COMMENT :D Chapter 7 The Betrayal “Ah, Sendoma, my son, welcome,” bellowed Grishtog across ...

The second part was AWESOME! Quote: Who was King Hedjlon? That question doesn't make sense to me because i think she would know who the king was unless he is ...

I've only read the first part but so far it is good and the diolague between Creiha and Markus is awesome, not akward. Quote: her forest green glowing with unquenchable ...