stupidiot92

Quote: I didn’t hold anything against her for this, as the time we were supposed to be studying we were laughing and flouncing around the school Don't we all. There ...

Quote: and I defiantly didn’t like the thought of them seeing Should be definantly not defiantly Quote: “She also pierced my hand,” I lied, I wanted to provoke a reaction. ...

Quote: But he had me now. Although today I positively hated him. I like how you have that foreshadow there. It really fits. Quote: back at half three to pick ...

The end seems abrupt. You should add more detail to the actions of the father. Also you have no mention of Clarice and him fighting anywhere so it seemed abrupt ...

This was an improvement of your first. The emotions of the character are very well described. I like how you have this character explaining the present and also having flashbacks. ...

WOW! That is an amazing poem. I loved it i am going to make a copy and post it on my door and put it in all my binders. I ...

The poem was good. but a little more detail would greatly improve it. There is an emotion there, but it isn't really talked about. I also like how you used ...

From the responses on my novel, right now titled The Line: Re-appearing, it seems that i do not convey the personality of my characters that well. I really need this ...

I liked the poem. Even though there was no rhyme it still flowed. The way you put a lot of detail on this poem was good because it is a ...

I love this poem. The rhyming was awesome and it still conveyed the message without using to large of word to make it rhyme. I also liked the 'emotion' of ...

I liked the shortness of it but detail wouldn't have been a bad thing here. I like the whole jist of the poem. It is a good way to convey ...

The rhyme wasn't that good, but i don't normally read poetry. There were a few times i went back and read cause i read wrong, but that was probably just ...

Have them talk or tell jokes to one another. Or some action happening along the way and they talk about it after it is done.

That was a good poem. It was a bit short but because it was short it was good. I think if you had extended it it would've been a completely ...

When i write poetry(i am not that good at it) I write down what comes to mind and let others tell me how to make it rhyme.