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I like the idea of this poem, and the more developed lines really struck me. I think, though, you should try to add more to the lines, even if that ...

People think that moment Is the lowest they'll be. That there is no greater pain They have ever or could ever see. But they're wrong, Oh, they're so mislead! That ...

Oh! chapter 1! I didn't see that when I posted the first comment, but I want to add comments about the second chapter. XD I think the writing in this ...

First, you have great imagery, the dream in the beginning as well as the description of the characters. I can tell a lot about both characters based on the way ...

thank you :) I always write in some kind of rhyme pattern, it feels more poetic to me most of the time. The entire second verse was very forced, I ...

The wind always reminds me of you; The touch, the ache, the kiss long overdue. That second when we look at one another's eyes, And feel in our bones, we ...

As everyone says, picturing the poem is very easy, which is a great quality. I would suggest, if you wanted to make this piece stronger, try varying your vocabulary. A ...

You have some great metaphors here, and a very clear point of view, but I would suggest looking back on the tenses you use. You switch between past and present ...

I was lost and scrambled In a place I never knew A place I never wanted to go through Turning and twisting Never finding my way And there was nothing ...