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Oh wow, I didn't even know you could do that! Thank you everyone so far for the critiques, it's been really helpful. I'm going to keep working on this poem, ...

Hi, sorry! I posted this in the lyrical poetry forum and someone told me it was the wrong forum to post in. I was still interested in getting more feedback ...

I re-did some things without the repetition. Critique this one! There’s this flower I’ve seen, Beautiful in every way. Full of blues, greens, golds, and grey. It blossoms one color ...

Hmm.. yeah.. I'm starting to think I should give up on the repetition thing for a while. I can't seem to make it work.. maybe I'll re-write the poem without ...

This was the original but I redid some parts. I'll leave this but the one you should critique is lower and says "critique this one!" There’s this flower I’ve seen, ...

Hey! So overall I really enjoyed this poem. It was very easy to read and the lines connected well. I agree with the line "And here I must stay" sounding ...

I was thinking about this poem again. I wanted to add a little more to it, a last third stanza. The punctuation doesn't match the first stanza but I'm not ...

Oh.. I was experimenting with structure, that repetition was my idea for writing this. The end of one stanza is supposed to carry into the beginning of the next. Is ...

There's a fold in this paper, A crease, a line, A literal wrinkle in a moment in time. There's a moment in time When the world is still, And all ...

Hey, reviewing again! :) I like how you tell the whole story, there's a progression from the rush of wanting someone for the first time to actually getting them and ...

Hey, so obviously you use imagery well here. There are a few technical points I thought might be helpful to point out, though. Mostly, the two stanzas feel disjointed, there's ...

The idea here is great, and reminds me of some thoughts I've had too. However, it is a little confusing in the beginning. You switch from one line about a ...

Hey, so I think most of the poem has a good flow to it. I like the lack of punctuation, actually. It helps replicate the fast paced day you seem ...

I don't really like punctuation, I would rather have not put it in but oh well. >.< Ignore it if you'd like. You were 20 feet away, In squared feet ...

Hi. So like me, you must love rhymes. I also write in complete rhyme patterns, but it can be tricky because some rhymes come out forced. Your emotion here is ...