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The parentheses are daring, because they're a technique you either enjoy or dislike. I love them. They kind of...give the reader a subconcious understanding of the uncertain balance of the ...

Better yet, was the cheese sharp?

Isn't "the boomerang" a new dance move?

Why, did not I spell "Gregory" wrong?

Was it not when she first met Gergory?

“Grandma…” The little blue eyes of Lulu changed to a crimson rage. I don't know whether you were leaning towards horror or humor here, but...the image made me giggle.

I think the description of the umbrella is lovely. It makes you read the poem more then once- the second time, for me, being when I realized the poem was ...

I'm listening to the washing machine.

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The frolicking pony is very pretentious so he always skipped around trees. When suddenly groundhogs attacked nearby settlers who were smoking some turkeys. Howling winds blasted rifles, the men graspe

Are you sure that was not just a diseased travelling relative of his?

We will miss your pluck and confidence here at YWS.

Yes...very comforting. (Breathes). Thanks for posting!

Wow Fishr, two thousand words- I'm definately not there yet, but last night I managed to pen around 500 words of mediocre stuff I probably wont use. But I at ...

The frolicking pony is very pretentious so he always skipped around trees. When suddenly groundhogs attacked nearby settlers who were smoking some turkeys. Howling winds blasted rifles, the men graspe