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Re: I'm new here :)
Heyy! :) Welcome to YWS! I'm also kinda new here and I'm still trying to get use to everything too. Hope to read one of ur posts soon. PM me ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: Fragile (excerpt) (changed title, use to be Intertwining)
Galen I checked my watch again and saw it was already 7:20. I frowned, wondering if he was going to show up anytime soon. I was about to call him ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: The Puppet's Dance
this is a very beautifully written piece with tons of expressive descriptions. The whole thing flows very well; its is smoothly connected and doesn't have any sort of awkward moments. ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: Excitement
wow! I must say, at first it kind of confused me, but as soon as I saw you were writing about excitement, it made a lot more sense. My favourite ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: Removed
overall its pretty good. There are a few things you could look over though: But when she answered Its best if you don't start with "but" you've also got some ...
Nov 30, 2011 -
Re: Why Turn Away?
this poem focuses on an big issue on how people would just turn a blind eye to people in need, which is great. It really tries to convince the reader ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: Fighting the edge of sorrow
w.o.w. This just left me breathless. The pictures you painted were really vivid and gave off a surreal, kind of dream like feeling. Personally, its very well written, but sometimes, ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: Sky
its really good :) just like the previous comment, the word choices were good; its nic to have a sweet and simple poem once in a while. I think the ...
Nov 29, 2011 -
Re: Your Lingering Warmth Chapter 2
I like how the story is join so far :) Its light, humorous and flows pretty well. Nothing much seems to happen but then again, every novel has those filler ...
Nov 26, 2011 -
Re: The Girl that Wanted a Whore
haha, lov your story so far. The beginning really hooked me into the story so that was good. I also loved your writing style from the pov of the guy. ...
Nov 26, 2011 -
Re: Blood On My Hands
w.o.w This is the type of short story that really leaves you with an impression. It seemed just so pure and pained since to me it seemed like the girl ...
Nov 26, 2011 -
Re: I Won't Go Home Without You - Maroon 5
wow. Personally, I always had the image of a depressed young man sitting alone, staring out a window with a glass of wine. Your point of view gives the whole ...
Nov 26, 2011 -
Re: Last Kiss
wow, i love this story a lot :D It is a very sweet, personal and honest story and I feel like you are spilling your heart our over these few ...
Nov 26, 2011