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Re: Life After I Died (Part 1)
The idea was interesting and it was well put together. I found it a bit quick but that is probably because you haven't gotten to the full story yet. I ...
Dec 20, 2011 -
Re: F*** You Inspiration
HAHAHA this is freaking great. I know EXACTLY what this feels like (I think most do). This writing is creative and something I don't think most people could come up ...
Dec 20, 2011 -
Re: Childish Things
This is a remarkable story. I want to hear more, were does the story go from here. I didn't notice any of the mistakes i was to busy focusing on ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: The Warrior Who Cried
I loved the intro. The scene is amazingly clear and epic. I'm guessing this isn't a literal warrior and the true story is a girl faceing the darkness in her ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: The Escape of Adam Seth
It was an interesting story. I enjoyed reading it. THe spelling mistakes were simple and I don't focus much on them (plus to me they don't bother the story that ...
Nov 19, 2011 -
Re: They are blind!!!
Great poem. I see this in the eyes of my fellow friends everyday. They deserve better you obviously understand. This work got my mind going. I will make sure that ...
Oct 31, 2011 -
Re: Detachment
Great poem! The emotion his carved in extremely well to the point wear I have never felt this way but can now understand a little more. The flow was wonderful. ...
Oct 31, 2011 -
Re: My Mind, My Murderous Mind
I am an abomination, I am a killer. I don't understand why I'm this way I just have to kill, and kill. The urges don't stop even as I watch ...
Oct 29, 2011 -
Re: Iris Carter
Very nice. This is a good start. I am not one for changing what is in the story unless the person asked so I won't give you any of that. ...
Jan 10, 2011 -
Re: Boxer
The bell rings and the match starts. The guy I'm fighting is massive, 130 pounds. Against me barely reaching 120. He was undefeated with 18 wins. I had one loss ...
Jan 10, 2011 -
Re: Bus Stop
This is a very good poem. Have you every realy felt like that cause I have and it is not a good feeling. Good job with meaning and emotion. Not ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: Love I (Decay)
wonderful peom. I loved the word chose and the meaning the most. This is the best poem I have read so far and I have read alot. The talet you ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: Beauty
Friggin awsome poem. I like happy poems. This one is about beauty and how you marvole something. Very nice world choice. You are added to my fallow list.
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: Shadows
Very nice poem and I think you should do what you think is right. If you think it should be longer then make it longer. If you think it should ...
Jan 7, 2011 -
Re: Foot prints in the snow
it was a nice poem i saw nothing wrong with it. I would actualy liked it more if it was longer, but it was deep.
Jan 7, 2011
