spiritblackwolf2705

Sitting in the emergency room tears swelling in my eyes the rapid beep of the machines pulsating through my mind I wrap my thoughts around it It is the only ...

Well done! It was very interesting and kept me reading. I found little errors, but those have already been pointed out. Keep up the good work! Can't wait to read ...

My parents know. I've had my noised pierced for about a month in a half. I take it out when I go to school though.

The roar of the bass like waves on the shore caressing my face shattering my inner core The melody of the violin like the song of the eagle It tickles ...

Thanks Ayra! :D

Wow, okay, Brad. I personally think you are to harsh, you may be trying to help with the writing and everything, but it doesn't seem like it. So if all ...

Umm, not much I can say about this piece besides, there really isn't any description of the characters. All you put is dialouge between them. I would suggest re-writing this ...

Okay, I found a few things wrong with this. Peace is a dove who spreads peace with it's love I think you should start a new line after dove. I ...

Edited!

Okay, thanks. I'll fix those things.

Shadows mask my dreams No more time to pick teams The warmth that I love Flies off with the last black dove As my mind twirls like a cyclone It ...

Oh, lol, sorry!

Wonderful! It was very interesting and kept me reading. You gave excellent descriptions of the male werecat. One spelling mistake I found: In tje 3rd paragraph you wrote slightly sallow, ...

o.O Harsh much?

Thanks! :D