spiritblackwolf2705

I think your story was very good, except for a few things here and there but people have already critiqued on those.

Sure Kim, I will add you as a friend :)

Nightmare's heart pounded, and her muscles were tensed. She wasn't going to let these creatures take another one of her kind, not again. Nightmare looked back at the rest of ...

I"m writing the first chapter for this story, this was just the prologue sort of...

Okay, I will try to fix it....I'm better with nature next nature story is going to be about a squirrel xD

Prologue March 12th, 1992 A small baby boy wrapped in a soft, cotton blanket was handed to his mother. "Congradulations! It's a boy!" Exclaimed a bulky doctor. Tears swelled in ...

Lol, it's okay.

Yeah, the last lines of each stanze don't rhyme....

*hugs* Thanks: :D

Thanks :)

The beast within, cries out in rage. The moon is high, let's set the stage. Here comes the rain, washes out her pain. The beast within, comes out again. Fingers ...

Okay, I didn't think about Whitefang when I wrote, though now that I think about it it does resemble his book...Well anyways I'm going to post a revised edition of ...

Oh and about the Stallions mostly being the leaders of a herd, I thought I would mix it up a bit, men don't always have to be dominant xD. Well ...

Okay! Thanks for the criticism, it will really help me when I'm writing future stories.

Okay, I will try to qork on all those things. :)