spiderman

Spiderman here. This is good. You gave good enough description and left a good amount of suspence at the end of the chapter. You show and not just tell and ...

For a short story this is pretty good. I like the story and it wasn't too rushed untill the end. She ran into the house and they never talked again. ...

I don't understand why people lie why people cheat why we lovw thwn hate But most of all I don't understand why we have war why we're not sorry for ...

OK, It's spiderman again. I really like this story and i hope you keep writing it. I cant critique this too much since there's not much to say, but I ...

Welcome to YWS. Hope you have a good time here. ~Spiderman~ :)

Thanks for the reviews guys. I'll try to quickly fix the grammar :).

4. The Cherub series, not sure how many people have read it but I think it is great. I think its great too. I can't choose a favorite, but why ...

It's pretty good. I love the whole artist and philospher concept. She's blind yet she's notices him :shock: . I went inside, thoughts spiraling in my head. There was nowhere ...

Well, I didn't like the last two books, Final Warning and Max. The first three were great and I believe Patterson's should of let it end at the third book. ...

I like this poem, but why is it called the "Monster under my bed"? It takes place in the basement (I guess... ) And under the stairs. We'll kill the ...

Its Spidey again. I love how you release information slowly and don't plop down big info dumps. It's what makes this story fun to read. Your action scene was awesome. ...

I forgot im supposed to do scene two.... :( Srry i'l get right to it>

Reveied yours Emalily. Great poem. I also did yours Prosithion.Lei è stato perfetto!

Spiderman Here. I'm the girl in the photograph The one who always knew That someday you'd forget me But I'm still in love with you My fave verse. Simple, but ...

Spiderman here. First, I got to say awesome avatar. Guess what even more awesome than your avatar. These paragraphs : Snow was falling gently in the pine forests of southwestern ...