spiderman

Spiderman here (No, i'm not dead. I've just been away from the computer that I missed a chance to review 4-7). So i've just finshed reading 4-7. Great as usual. ...

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Spiderman here. I probably won't be much help here. I was a little confused by the story at first, but I reread it and it became clearer. The name angel ...

2 words : SPELL CHECK!

Spiderman Here. I don't think she means Viking, when she says it. I think it more refers to the region of Scandinavia. Okay, great voice, great description and imagery. It ...

Spiderman here. *Also does the secret green handshake, but does it hanging upside down* This piece was short and intriguing. As a reader, I was never bored. That mortician has ...

Spiderman Here. Let's start off with some grammar. Trevial is a strange, dustless, some what maroon place. Should be "Trevial is a strange, dustless, and somewhat maroon place." if you ...

I liked this chapter. The wrods seemed to just flow together. You set us up with a history of the main chracter and a setting for the story. I disagree ...

Spiderman Here. The plot sounds promising and unique. The prologue seems short. Grammar mistake have already been posted, except one: She was out of the library before the manager stepped ...

Spiderman Here. That was terribly short for a prologue. At least make the prologue. 400 words. You could make it longer by describing each man, giving there names, describing the ...

Spiderman Here. That's Western hospitality! I grab a can of beans and slip it into my pocket. A can of beans fits in his pockets! He must have some large ...

Spiderman Here. Great as usual. This chapter is pretty hard to critique as theres nothing wrong with it. I would add description of the town in idaho. It doesn't mater ...

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Spiderman here! I never read the first version of this story, but I must say that I am deeply impressed. I usually avoid books about dragons, but this one actually ...

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