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hoped you liked that! AT RISE: a hospital, the three kids are in beds. SPENCER (Shay), LAURA (Benson) are there. DOCTOR is looking at scans. SPENCER: doctor, is Carly and ...

This is the first episode of 5. Basically, this is a bit of icarly that is the bomb! it will make you sad, happy, or any other thing that I ...

This was a very good piece. Though in some places I went um. This is bedcause of too much DISCRIPTION. that will give you your downfall. Also too much TALK. ...

I find that your story was interesting. I've never read twilight, so I'll try to do this. WHAT YOU NEED MORE OF plot TALK WHAT YOU NEED LESS OF discription ...

ok. and here is chapter 4, if you don't mind: I really like where I'm heading, I think though, it's too random. What do you think? I also think that ...

and here is chapter 4 (a wee bit better then the last: READ IT) MATT

and here is the 4th: MATT

HSM IN RL CHAPTER 4; the portal "OMG. I knew that the baby was due in June, but not before graduation!" said Matt "would you drive a hell of a ...

ok. What you need to do is ALOT. Well, you need ACTION, talking, and description! then, make a story out of this! If you would give a bit of thought, ...

ok, that was er, um, good. What you need to do, is sit down, and write. Plot where this will go, and the like. I read it, but you need ...

hi, I'd like three chapters reviewed: chapter 1: 2. 3. it's HSM\AATC fanfiction, so watch out! MATT

The r-rated scene. Eeek. Please edit so it is ... more sophisticated. Plus I don't think in movie-verse the characters would do that anyway. [According to what I have heard ...

new chapter: it may be a bit strong at the end. thanks! MATT

CHAPTER 3: DCMC They were at the Disney channel medical center. "well, here goes nothing." said Matt "Matt, it's not like we're gonna starve or meet six talking chipmunks." "come ...

ok. I did not really understand it. but I'll try. First make a new line when people are speaking. Then, say who is speaking. Then do not give us too ...