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I really like your descriptions. It made everything more vivid. The only problem was that at the beginning it made it kind of slow and it was hard for me ...

The rhythm seemed a little awkward to me, but I thought it was really funny. Give it a little work and it'll be hilarious.

Nice poem, I think it's one of the best you've written so far. There's one thing I might suggest that kind of distracted me about it. The line that says: ...

The mime is supposed to represent a person who is different. I'm trying to show how harshly some people can react to something different and that people need to realize ...

I read this when I was like 11 so I didn't really get it. All I know is that I hated the pigs and I felt bad for the work ...

I used to listen to music, but now it distracts me. I find the loud hum of my computer helps me to write though.

I've got to remember to click on the reply button and not the post button. :oops: As I was going to say, I agree that you write "I hate" too ...

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I really love the imagery in this story. You are really a good writer and don't let ANYONE tell you you're not. BTW, thanks for welcoming me. I look forward ...

Well, I was having trouble reading this, but I'm sure it mostly was because it is late here. Anyway, it was a nice beginning. I was kind of confused about ...

I know I told you that I think you should fix the format on this so that it will be easier to read. I'm just posting to remind you. :D

Yay! I'm glad you joined. Let me know when you have any stories up so that I can read them.

I ride about once a week, but I haven't been able to that much recently because it's too snowy and cold here that my lessons were canceled until March. I'm ...

I don't mind at all if someone nitpicks my stories to death, that's why I signed up. I'm probably going to put some of my stories up to be critiqued ...

Thanks for welcoming me everyone.