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FADE IN: INT. NIGHT- OF APARTMENT #115 The Apartment is very bland, white walls with no decorative items, old furniture and is darkly lit. A party is currently going on. ...

I agree this poem is kinda bad, but it seems like what your going through this is necessary to get through it. Good luck with your mind

I think this was good. I must say your much more sympathetic and forgiving than I would ever be! I think the only thing I could say with grammatical errors ...

This was really good. The only two lines I didn't like were, "Since that reason and to that reason." I didn't think those two lines fit in well with your ...

This was good. If you didn't say it was a Reservoir Dog rip off I probably wouldn't have been thinking that, but I definitely would of had Tarantino in my ...

I can't really say any thing more constructive than what has already been said. The imagery and your description's were very good for this type of writing and story. I ...

Cool I respect that and most of your critique was true, but I can't fully respect it if you're seriously asking that question.

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This was good, not exactly literary, but maybe a philosophical writing?

w y that.

So I read this poem as if this character were losing their superiority mind set and imagination of perfection and coming into contact with a greater wisdom. As if this ...

I thought this was really good especially with the fear of darkness emphasis. Anyways as I was reading this poem I felt it was so strong and when you put ...

Wow your only fourteen and self taught. This is pretty much impressive. The only thing was the white on his extending body, but that is still not even that big ...

I'm into satirical writing, Science fiction and non-fiction such as Hunter Thompson and David Sedaris. Also, haha I am not a fan of the EMO genre. What'd about yourself?

I agree with the other posts that it read more like a poem rather than a song. I thought it started off kinda weak, but got very strong as it ...