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Here I am, as promised! I knew I'd already ready the first few chapters! But I haven't done four and five, yet. I was going to say that I haven't ...

I don't really care about the adds that much...they're very easy to ignore, in my opinion. However, if YWS needed a fee to continue functioning, I would definitely pay a ...

An author of mystery books - secluded, maybe scared of forming relationships with people. Tall, with cropped dark brown hair and blue eyes? lol, I'm probably WAY off. Nancy Nimbleheimer

I used to live in Portland, and visit there a lot...they've got some pretty nasty weather, but not as notoriously rainy as Seattle. Lots of greenery, LUSH trees and yards, ...

Geez...there are so many bloodthirsty women in Greek Mythology, but none of them kill their husbands/boyfriends, per se...they just kill their husband's lovers, children, relatives, and pets. :P Eg, M

Ha HA! You see, my method of waiting until everybody else has already done awesome critiques works! Now I can be my normal lazy self and just point out a ...

hey there! I have one thing to add to Snoinks excellent comments: The scene where he gets beat up could be slightly less 'telling,' a little more 'showing.' Instead of ...

While I do agree with what the previous critiquer said, I must say I really enjoyed this piece. I would like a little more clarity on where exactly Khor is ...

Username: 50 % doesn't mean anything to me...I'm sure it's cool in its own way though! :D Custom Title: eek..forgot to look if you have one. i don't think you ...

lol 7/10

I really liked this...don't really have time to write a real critique but I just wanted to ask if the whole quotes precisely from Pride and Prejudice was on purpose? ...

I agree...don't post character summaries! In a well-written book we should be able to tell one character from another by the writing itself. It's kind of like posting a picture ...

They wouldn't let him relax. His head was growing heavier and heavier, and an ache started behind his eyes and slowly traveled back through his head, gripping his brain. He ...

I see the other critiquers have already beaten me to all of the stuff I was going to point out as far as nitpicks so, so I'll just compare it ...

I think if you're not writing a fantasy novel - cliches are still easy to find. I don't even want to get into the big discussion and bitter argument here...I'm ...