sokool15

First of all...extremely well written. There were not a lot of gramatical or spelling errors. However, you never made it clear what the relationship was between Glory and Mariel, or ...

I agree with the others...a really good beginning. The tenses, however, seem to be slightly messed up. You begin by speaking in past tense, but then you throw in a ...

Ha! I like this...continue the story, please! This entry was just a little too short to do any real good, however. You should wait until you have an entire chapter, ...

I really liked this! It was entertaining, interesting, and very well-written. One thing, and one thing only: 'hostels.' Is that really a word or did you mean; "hotels?" Forgive my ...

I love you. When I first saw you I'd never loved before. I didn't know what it meant. But some force inside me, some hidden knowledge that had always been ...

chapter the second ~ in which i introduce myself in a strange and embarrassing manner to the new neighbor and wash a bird "Mom! No, no, no! It's freezing! I ...

Thanks for your comments. The weird thing is, my computer program always marks my apostraphies as wrong when i do them the right way. I guess it sort of made ...

Overall a piece that made me want to read more! Are you going to continue? Please... I don't have time, I'm afraid, to go over your piece with a fine-toothed ...

This is the lyrics...sort a song...sort of...that I found on my computer desk top. They're kind of funny, so I thought I'd give them a try. There are a couple ...

Wow...this was pretty good! *welcome to the site, by the way.* First of all, you had a few typos and some strange sentences: It stands there, and I feel it's ...

This is something I found in an old folder I didn't even know I had. I started reading it and was laughing almost the whole way through. This is the ...

...and looked to see...a piece of boiled cabbage. He could tell that it was boiled cabbage because it was green and slimy. Unfortunately for him, however, it was the toughest ...

'Too Late Now' is on hold right now. My noble motives are this: I need time to re-assess my goals, find where I'm going with it and find a way ...

Sorry about the little mix-up on your critique. Something must have gotten off. I signed my critique before I was supposed to, then put corrections afterwards. If this is a ...

Overall, very intriguing! I'd like to keep reading. To begin at the beginning; the first few paragraphs, where Cat is trying to get Ace's attention while Ace is trying to ...