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Okay, wow. I must admit I was shocked - astonished - startled - surprised to find that you're a very good writer! The reason? Profiles at the beginning. I must ...

Hi KJ! Good to see your stuff on here. *cough appleandagraveyard?? cough cough* :P Okay, despite the fact that this was basically a retelling of the Twelve Dancing Princesses, it's ...

Hm. Well, it's really imaginative, and a very good setting and scene, with a fun tone, but I really couldn't forge my way through very much of it. The capitalization, ...

*gasps and shudders* yeek! Should have waited until morning to read this. It's midnight and I'm alone... ideal for creepiness, right? :P Very well done story. I enjoyed it a ...

Um... yeah. Some definite problems here. I really like the idea, and it sounds like you've got good ideas and an engaging voice going here, but serious deficiencies with grammar, ...

Mmmm, lovely. I really don't have any sweeping generalizations for this one, just a few typo thingummies. “I guess, yeah, I don’t have any plans. I’m just trying to finish ...

Awwwwww.... this whole story is so sweet and simple, it makes me smile whenever I read it. I have a feeling Kate's going to do something unpleasant soon, here, though. ...

That's very sweet. I thought the end was very, very abrupt, though. You should have done it at the beginning of the next chapter - that would have made more ...

It was typical of my family to throw a St. Patrick's Day party, only invite Italian people, and then not cook any food remotely Irish. Hee hee... that made me ...

Welcome to YWS! The trick is to make a bunch of friends on the site, have them critique the first part of your story, and then they'll pester you until ...

Hey... um... a little confused here! Which one goes first, this one or the one in romantic fiction? You should post all in one forum so I'll know, or at ...

I just wrote this while I was procrastinating on editing my novel. I tried to make it look like it had a certain symmetry with lines and stuff, but if ...

Hey, this is really good again! You've got a couple minor problems with grammar and punctuation, but nothing too confusing or unfixable. It's mostly your storyline and characters that have ...

YEEK! You're amazing! I loved this made me smile to hard to see Caiden finally loosening up, showing some interest. It was perhaps a little sudden - he was so ...

Oooh...*sigh* KJ, why aren't you, like three different people, so you could continue all of your novels at once! That was lovely. Sad, though. Did the first chapter just pop ...