sokool15

Okay, I could crit the rest of your stories, but since I've already read the whole thing, I don't think I will. This is my last crit for this story. ...

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Loooove it! Much better with the spacing and dialogue punctuation this time...great! I love the prof. I wish I had one like him at my college!

Okay, I agree with all the Pirate Lady said, and have some things to add... Your spacing of the paragraphs. You need to put an empty line in between each ...

Yes, I liked this one! How could Kizel say stuff about being friends when he's so cruel? Well, at least Khor's not being tortured. And I think you should know, ...

Good job! I like it how Khor can manipulate...yeah. I find myself at a loss for appropriate expressions to display the feelings I have for your work. I leave you ...

Er...wow. You seem to favor the coughing up of blood as a suitable punishment for any past unknown wrongs ALL of your characters have every done. Hmm... I'm already past ...

Cheers! A newbies. May they soon become incorporated into the ranks of insanity that frequent this hallowed site. *looks around suspiciously, then whispers* I was once a newbie, too! Hey, ...

Yes, it looks a bit like Lizzie Bennet! The only problem is...the woman, when standing, would be taller than the tree she is sitting under! The tree is good. The ...

Sweeeeet chapter! Good job...um, do you still want me to crit here, even though you gave me the whole thing? I'm reading it now, and I could keep critting here ...

Haha!!! LOVE IT! Great once again. I hope you get lots of good reviews on this, because it deserves it. You need to keep posting this, soon! It's nice when ...

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Oooooh! Good one! Trapped in one's own mind...now that is a concept I can understand. Time travel is hard, mind stuff is easy. Okay, good chapter overall. A few typos ...

Sweeet...Stillgrave got all the stuff. This is awesome. And the new name - the turqoise scarab - is cool! Anyway, this was an awesome chapter...pray continue.

you really name your nails? Anyway, this was a really good piece, and Claudette caught the typo. Besides, how could I , who am not worthy to lick the tip ...