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That was sweet! Short, but sweet. They are rolling together on the rug, now they are dragging balloons and toys the size of themselves across the room, now climbing up ...

He-llo, luv! Welcome, darling, to the YWS!!! We all love poetry here, except those of us who don't. But you don't have to worry about those who dont' because you'll ...

I agree with what the others said about expanding on the scenery and descriptions. Let us get to know the character, visualize the place in our mind. It will capture ...

8/10 pretty cool and smooth, but the amusing ones push my buttons.

1/10...sorry, but I just don't get it at all. *Mine is a quote from a Monty Python skit, so it might not make sense out of context.*

ROFL!!! Literally tears in my eyes. My family thinks I have gone crazy, because I am laughing so hard. That was HILARIOUS!!! Congrats on hilariousness. I loved it. Nothing wrong ...

This story, if slightly pointless, was fun to write and based off a true story. The day started when I woke up. Perhaps you think that is redundant. The day ...

Nancy laughed, shaking her head. "I've given lessons before, but not so successfully," she said, clapping her hands. Jack was holding Luna's shoulders, helping her balance. Nancy looked at Luna ...

Yes, I agree with what previous critiquer said. It's a little sudden. Although the entire screaming part was very good, I must say, you should work into and out of ...

OH, goodness...you are an excellent writer. Almost faultless, and the others caught the faults. Your writing style was very easy to read, and flowed incredibly smoothly. Your dialogue was very ...

Welcome, welcome. I'd like to be able to say that all members of Dynamo's family are welcome here, but I don't know Dynamo. But you're welcome here anyway! :P Anyway, ...

What Squallz said. :) Yes, I agree with all that Squallz said above, good critiques, there. Um...yeah. Not much else to say except good job! ~Me 8) P.S. Still haven't ...

NOOOOOO!!!

Science fiction *not my forte*

Yes, I agree with the others. I like the one of the engines, especially, and the other are nice pictures but just not really ART, if you know what I ...