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Her Exalted Highness Duchess Sarah the Subservient of Chalmondley Chumleyton LOL! I wish they weren't so long, or I'd put it for my custom title. :D This is fun!

8/10 lol. :) It made me smile. Is it a quote from somewhere?

6/10 nice, but I think it would be better if I understood it, or perhaps heard the song it was from?

And lo!, in their great haste, the door to the prison remained unlocked, so scared were they of the disease that now swam around in the cage. Er...hem...'lo'??? Dare I ...

I assume when talking about Michael's 'master' we're talking about God? Wouldn't it be cool to capitilize the 'He' whenever you talk about him? I mean, I understand if you ...

I'm going to start out with the nasty crits and then flatter you with the good stuff, all right? Just know that because you're such a good writer, I might ...

LOL 8/10. That was funny.

This was funny, but seemed a bit...er...silly, for my taste. Some of the parts where you sort of make an 'aside' to the reader: This was the proper way to ...

Mmm, I liked this! The whole thing with multi/multy/multi-storey/multy-story/etc etc etc...I think there are lots of different ways to do it, depending on where you come from. Anyway, overall it ...

Sweet chapter. I enjoyed usual. I'm still waiting patiently for the next, chapter, though. :P Anyway, I do agree with what Twinflower and Greenjay critiqued, but couldn't find much else! ...

I must admit, I really did like this. Although what the others say about spacing and stuff was admittedly true, I enjoyed reading the story and some of your descriptions ...

I like it. I won't point out your spacing, punctuation and grammar problems because you said it was just a character sketch. She sounds like she could be a very ...

Thanks so much for your crits, guys! I haven't actually written more to this yet, I just wanted to throw the idea out there. I'll continue it if I have ...

I gave a humph sound. What I wanted more than anything in the world was to get in on the game before Janice got too drunk to deal. I examined ...

I learn opera songs in French, but I fear that is all. The Italian language is more my style, and I hope to begin in earnest to study German and ...