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Well, what can I say? Your writing style itself is very good...smooth, easy to read, and mostly grammatically correct. I can't say much for the plot, though. If this is ...

Hum...well. Hum. :) Let's just say...I wouldn't write anything like that myself, but if it's necessary for your story...different strokes for different folks, I guess. One thing I think you ...

Hum...well. Hum. :) Let's just say...I wouldn't write anything like that myself, but if it's necessary for your story...different strokes for different folks, I guess. One thing I think you ...

Oh, great. Just wonderful. Again, I really, really liked this piece. A wonderful job in characterizing everybody, really delving into your own thoughts. My mother had heard me get up ...

Hmmm, okay, well like I said, I've already read this, so I just skimmed through. “Do you remember those beams of light we shot at each other?” he nodded once ...

Good job, good job! I loved this. One problem I have throuh your whole that apparently we don't have enough connection with the characters to remember who they are. The ...

9/10 very good, and SO C.S. Lewis. Good job.

I found it! A link to Snoink's awesome dialogue page. Check out Snoink's other suggestions as well...they're always helpful. Check that out, my friend, and you will 'be one happy ...

Wow, I liked this! You have some really, really great descriptions in there. I can't really identify, because my family has been camping and hiking ever since I was a ...

Hmmm...okay, I'll tell you right up front that I didn't read the whole thing. You have a lot of spelling, grammatical and punctuation issues, and I don't have time for ...

9/10 HILARIOUS! lol...*goes off chuckling*

Writergirl, thank you for critiquing my story...I just wanted to tell you that yes, this is short for a chapter, but it's the second half of chapter 19, you see. ...

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The messenger fled, wisely believing that Anull would have little hesitation taking out his frustrations on the poor messenger . Anull slammed a fist down onto the arm of his ...