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Wow. That story took a very sudden turn from normal to abnormal! Frankly, perhaps a little too sudden. There's no forewarning, and then suddenly they're getting attacked by strange winged ...

Well, there was a slight problem again in this chapter with your 'he-him' 'she-hers' etc. Names have a purpose, you know. So...just go through the story yourself, concentrating on how ...

Very good, VERY much better than the last chapter! Getting started is always the hardest part. A nice job getting Elizabeth's creepy feelings without making us think that she's an ...

Most important issue to be discussed? Definitely whether Pat Buchanan does, or has at any time, or will in the future...exist. Because nobody seems to know who the heck he ...

NOTE: My school assignment...second choice. If you have time, you coudl also look at the first one and say which one you like better! But it's okay if you don't ...

Well, I read your novel...skimmed through it, really. it's good as it is, but the writing style is a little immature. I'm sorry, but I don't have time to get ...

Well, it seems to me...seeing as the books are written for children, and all...that it might be bad to actually go into all that and accentuate the gayness. I mean, ...

The boy nodded and swiftly left the room, leaving the manila folder with the man. He didn’t take long and when he returned he had a boy with him, the ...

Oooohhh. *is holding breath* Vampire stalker...BWAHAHAHAAAAA (evil laugh) *hem* er...yes. I have to tell you, I don't usually go for vampire stories...because of the fact that the concept of vampires ...

Er...hem...rated 'R' for language and slight mature themes, right? I think the f-word warrants that. I liked this a lot! Very original, I loved how the entire story was based ...

Hello, hello! Please, no need for shyness here. We're all fairly decent human beings (although some have shown alarming tendencies towards vampirism) and as long as you're perfect, even the ...

Lol, more cowbell. 9/10. The second one...8/10. Clever, and so true. I also like your avatar...makes me want to dance.

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Yay! Thanks so much for critiquing, you guys. The problem is, it was supposed to be a one-page play, which was why there was so little description. I hadn't thought ...

Nobody Beats the 11-10 (Annie is holding a piece of paper, looking down at it and smiling slightly.) Annie: Full credit again! (Frederick walks up holding a similar piece of ...