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Wow - you really should send it in to Lindt! So pretty...I'm kind of curious, though, how big are they really? I've never seen one before. You guys are all ...

Wow! These are great pictures. I especially like numbers two and three. I felt that number one was zoomed up too close...I was a little overwhelmed. Number three...she looks like ...

Hey, there! I really love this picture - it makes me want to go be creative! I think your glasses are really cool, too. I was cursed with unhappy glasses ...

Eek! I think this one's a little long...if I need to I can split it into two posts, just let me know. Questions 1. Is the switching view awkward? It's ...

Okay, so I'm speaking from a cynic's point of view here, I guess, and from the standpoint that I've never been in love, so feel free to razz me out ...

Just a couple of minor things, then I'll gush, I promise. You had a few typos: starred = stared, etc, but nothing you couldn't pick up on your own if ...

Awwww, MAN!!! What do you mean, will not be continued? *murders over internet* It's a great story. I love Vikki's charecter, and I agree with other critiquers in that you ...

Very nice, extremely well done! Almost as good as Dad. good = well Besides that, just look at other critiques. I'm so sucked into this story! Great work. ~MademoiselleKOol 8)

I just want to say one quick thing: "where's the keys" is wrong. Keys is plural, "where's" is singular. Where's the key or Where are the keys. Otherwise, I loved ...

Um, I haven't got any critiquing questions this time. Just tell me what you really think. I can bear it! *braces self* :) Have fun! Chapter 3 Penelope opened the ...

Hey there! I really liked this piece, overall. I think you have a very engaging writing style that kept me reading. A couple of things: Rubbing his furry covered hands ...

I'm standing in the huge church, and excitement is rising in my veins. I've never been to Jerusalem before. The darkness surrounds me, closing me in, but I'm not scared ...

Hmmm...well, it seemed completely unconnected to the first bit, but it was still good. I'm an opera singer, so it was really fun and interesting for me to read, because ...

Hey there! I realize you posted this a long time ago, but chapter two is more recent and I had to read this first anyway. The other people got most ...

Thanks so much all who critiqued my first chapter! This one's a little shorter, sort of an in between actions chapter to get in touch with the charecter's true thoughts ...