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Thanks guys! What refreshingly honest replies. *grin* If I decide it's worth it I'll work on it. Thanks again, MademoiselleKool

A/N: I'm a fan of the first verse, but the rest of them... bleh. Any suggestions? A silver lining Graces every soft contour Traced in light by some skilled Hand; ...

Hmmm... I have to say this is not my favorite tone for a poem - opening with a question, talking directly to the reader and yet through the rest of ...

Hi there! I haven't been to this site for a while so I apologize in advance if I'm behind the times. I have to say that overall I really enjoyed ...

This is a scene from American Psycho... is it right to pass this off as your own work? The movie came out before this was written... you had to have ...

First of all... You're an excellent writer, and you did most of your grammatical stuff right, your word choice was good, your characterization was complete. The problem wasn't your writing, ...

Hey! I don't think anybody's going to be tearing this apart, love. Great, great story. You've really drawn the reader into complete sympathy with the main character. Beautiful little piece. ...

Sorry, double-posted.

Hey there, love I do like the overall tone of your story - it's a good writing style, light, easy to read. Check out the tips on spacing above, though. ...

Just want to know if it's worth continuing. Enjoy! ~MademoiselleKool 8) Count Dracula had directed me to go to the Golden Krone Hotel, which I found, to my great delight, ...

I do agree with the previous critiquer in that the love is happening too fast. (Note: to be redundant, the smell thing still confuses me.) In the first two chapters ...

I like it - very good continuation from the first chapter. I'm still confused as to what the main character is. I'm probably stupid and skipped over some critical information ...

Hey! First of all I just want to express how awesome your story is. I don't have much to say - all the other critiquers pretty much raked it up. ...

Hey! Just started tossing out some brainwaves on paper last night and this is what happened. What do you think? Let me know if it's worth cleaning up and continuing ...

I forgot to mention this sentence, too: I had no idea what was happening, where I was being taken, and for once the goal-oriented girl was too frightened to think ...