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Hey Al3xx! Welcome to YWS! Your story was good, but I would have liked to see more descriptions and less dialogue. Yes, the dialogue is important, but I feel like ...

Hey ultraviolet! Nice twist in events, I don't know if you meant to do this (probably) but I thought this was the MCs wedding day. You did a wonderful job ...

Hey imaginemymind! (I like your user name btw) I love this story! I hope you continue this because I would love to know what Miriam had written for Justin. A ...

Hey LavenderBlue! This story has a good plot line going behind it, I like that! I haven't read your other chapters, but from this one I can tell you have ...

hey trhwrites! I really don't have much to say about this story, it is very well written and I enjoyed reading it (: It's a typical, yet slightly unusual love ...

I let out a shriek that permeated through my dreams. I awoke, startled and shaken from the intensity of my sleep. As my senses began to adjust to my surroundings, ...

Hey JaneThermopolis! For only having 103 words, I love this! Personally, I don't think this requires a conflict, it could be just a memory from a little girl and memories ...

hey screamandshout, This is a beautiful piece you have written here. Sure, the plot is not beautiful, but the way you have written it will touch upon many hearts. I ...

hello FireandIce326! This was a good poem, my favorite part was Eternal life is such a good lie, But in the end, we all must die. The life that is ...

Hello sparkle8744! This story is written very well, I loved it! Awesome development of plot and characters, interesting twist adding in a pregnancy! I only have one correction to make ...

hey AudreyHearts! This was absolutely adorable!! It serves it's purpose, cute little love story. Typical twist with the friends liking the same guy. The only thing I must point out ...

hey Pretty Crazy, This was very random, to say the least. I think because it was so random, that your story was all over the place. I was very confused ...

hey trhwrites! I haven't read your previous chapter in this series, so if I point out anything you have already talked about in the last chapter, please disregard. Despite being ...

hey ilovemyboys! This was very cute(; but I do have a few suggestions to take this piece and make it even cuter! First of all, I was in love with ...

hello xangeleighfshox! You've got the works of a story going with this, but you should try to draw the reader in and describe "this guy" more. Yes he may be ...