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Hey Misfit! I'm SodapopLunchbox with a review for you. I have not read your previous two chapters, so I cannot provide solid plot advice. If anything I say was revealed ...

Hello LovelyDisaster! I'm SodapopLunchbox and I'm here to review your work! I can see the scene you are trying to capture here, which is good, but I think you can ...

Hello Carlito! I'm SodapopLunchbox (: I'm going to go straight into reviewing, but I just want to let you know that I think you have a good idea here but ...

Hello WriteWriter! I'm SodapopLunchbox (: I have not read your other chapters, so if I mention something I was confused on that was written within the last two, just disregard ...

I let out a shriek that permeated through my dreams. I awoke, startled and shaken from the intensity of my sleep. As my senses began to adjust to my surroundings, ...

Hey Persephoneia! What a wonderful poem you have here! It's very childlike and comforting, I wish my mother let me play outside in the rain with my golashes! But that's ...

Hey Litehawk! This was an amazing poem! I really don't have anything to point out that the other reviewers haven't already. The idea behind this poem was well thought out, ...

Hey romance otaku! Another well written installment of The Art Murderers! This chapter was different, but I wish you focused on the Murders a bit more. Maybe you should give ...

Hey ChibiBear, Welcome to YWS! I think this prologue is interesting, however, I've seen this type of prologue before. Not saying that you can't use it, but I'm just giving ...

I've been reviewing a lot of work lately and one consecutive thing that I comment on everytime is: EMOTION I feel myself typing the same line over and over again ...

Hey KasanKokoro! You have a decent story here, but it needs some work. I noticed that you switched tenses quite often, a good piece of work should only be written ...

Hey hockeyfan87! Welcome to YWS! I'm SodapopLunchbox and I'm here to review your work. You can write, but I think you could make this piece better. It lacks emotion and ...

Hey LiveScreamWriting, (awesome name btw) I think you have a good start here, but you should elaborate more. If you used the beginning of this to start off a love ...

Hey Sionarama! This made me laugh in a good way! You some fun back into poetry. The only critique I have to give is about one of your stanzas. but ...

Hey darkangel_05! I saw your signature and I thought it was hilarious that you asked if people wanted a review and then gave a link to your story. This is ...