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  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Short story-The Project

    Wow, that was fantastic! You painted such a beautiful picture! I honestly have nothing to say negative about your posting, except that a few times I thought of some better ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Blue Ice Fire...prologue

    Wow, that was great! I only have a few suggestions for changes. On the subject of grammar and spelling, just go back and double check that you have all the ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: untitled book - prologue

    I really think you have a great start here, only a few things to nit-pick about. You tend to use alot of sentence fragments and short sentences, and combining some ...

    Jan 13, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: The Demon Stirs - Prologue

    Yes, I am aware that it's a bit cliched, but I promise that everything will be explained at a later time :). Reasons for everything :wink: . It does continue ...

    Jan 11, 2010
  • Science-Fiction Novels Re: Ignorance Is Bliss: Prologue

    LOVE IT. It's fantastic enough for a pink dancing elephant :elephant:

    Jan 10, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: werewolves/vampires chapter 2

    I've decided to edit/comment in green :) Teal'C "Why the hell did you do that for" I screamed at Anna, who was lounging near the airport water taps. A buzz ...

    Jan 10, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Black Rose-Chapter 1

    I generally agree with Lydia, although I'd like to add a few things. To be honest, I was fairly confused with the last paragraph. You should consider adding more transitions, ...

    Jan 10, 2010
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Short Story: The Enchanter's House

    I rather liked it, although personally I would change some of the wordings, but that's just minor details. I enjoyed how the furniture and everything had personalities, and how the ...

    Jan 10, 2010
  • Fantasy Novels Re: The Demon Stirs - Prologue

    Nearly four thousand years ago, a man by the name of Lornath Anageo came to power on the elf-human continent of Paliege. Lornath had been young, charismatic, and ambitious when ...

    Jan 10, 2010


The poetry of the earth is never dead.
— John Keats