snickerdooly

Okay thanks! I really like your suggestions and I won't give up! By the way the paragraph that you fixed up was really good you must be an amazing writer... ...

Chapter 4 Darkness envelopes me, it pulls me under its wicked cape. A sweet feeling of floating then I awake, my mind is blurred, and it feels like I’ve slept ...

I love this poem all the rhyming words actually go with this poem! Great job! But there are a few misspelled words and punctuation errors but I bet if you ...

And I know this was your first post and all so if you have any questions you can ask me even though I'm a newbie too I know how to ...

OH MY GOD!!! that was awesome!! you need to write more and PM when you do because that was amazing! I wouldn't fix anything it was awesome.. wait you could ...

Good job! I really liked it but you could work on the rhythm a bit. On the last part of the poem you could do: "She was suffocating, drowning it ...

Prologue We escape together, his feet crunch in the gravel. Slowing his stride he looks behind us. No, no one follows. My steps are weak and my feet stumble beneath ...

Okay I love it, and by the way your really good at making your characters speak with dialogue and all that. Something you need to work on a bit though ...

I love your story could you PM me when more are is posted much obliged. - Snickerdooly

I hate how he is using another girl who is innocent and frightened It's so Stupid!!!

Incantation by Alice Hoffman is an amazing book, who else has read this I want to get your opinion.

I disagree with Layla I could read it tons of times. I loved the book! Read it last year, now that I'm thinking about it I'm going to read it ...

Hi! I loved it but it needs much description into the lives of the characters, but I think that the idea was marvelous and I believe you should write more! ...

I love it, it's a great beginning. This is my very first review so bear with me, I like how it's written but it could use a lot more description ...

I've wrote all the way to chapter 10 so it's pretty long so, I'm posting it in sections. Prologue We escape together, his feet crunch in the gravel. Slowing his ...