snap

Um, I've never read the Da Vinci Code... And I also find the claim that I like to hear myself talk slightly offensive. And whilst we're here, I kind of ...

Actually, he had a number of followers, although mainly in Isreal. News of Him didn't reach other parts of the world until later. What's with the 'actually'? You've just repeated ...

Snap: Actually, Jesus' influence wasn't really felt until later. At his time, and after his death, he still only had relatively few followers (hence the lack of historical info on ...

They aren't in patterns where I live. What galaxy do you live in? :) How did grapefruit get its name?

Granted, but you injure your opponent, who has a deadly, blood borne disease. I wish that I was rich, would keep the money for the rest of my life, that ...

They are, but that's called French, Spanish, Italian, etc. What would a woman REALLY do for chocolate?

Obviously, Superman would win. While the Hulk is stronger, he stomps around in the blind anger of an oversized tantrum. Superman, however, thinks before he acts. He also has the ...

Post more!!! It's really good!! It sounds like a seventh grader would talk. Okay, now for the critiques. In the first several sentences, you used "exclaimed" a lot, i would ...

Thanks, Amelia You're right, I do "tell" a lot in this story, lol. It's just that it's so long, I feel that if I show everything that needs to be ...

I walked brusquely along the dirty sidewalk, absently studying the cracked cement. I thought of my duties when I got home: work, and the mess that abided in my apartment. ...

Midnight Flight The hands crept silently toward their destination; each second passed in painful slowness. I waited, silently, hoping my prayers would be answered. Finally the last second passed, the ...

I really enjoyed that. It was interesting how there was a sort of...omniscient...observer that you didn't learn about until half way through the story. I believe the punctuation issues have ...

I really enjoyed it, you did a good job at making it sound like a high schooler, with high schooler concerns. But there are a couple of things I noticed, ...

I still use BC and AD. I think they're going a little over kill on it. It wasn't just because it was a Christian dominated world they used these letters, ...

Hey, guys, I'm writing a novel set in the 1800's, having to do with the Underground Railroad. I was wondering if any of you knew how it was run. Did ...