smorgishborg

Pgs, Are you serious? The OP's last post was on "Tue Nov 14, 2006 6:25 pm", I'd critique for people who will actually see your comments and use them to ...

I enjoyed it as well- it was fairly conventional but had enough of an offbeat quality to throw the reader and provide a memorable reading experience. I generally echo Snoink's ...

6/10 - Not a lot of variety, but a ton of rock that walks the line between solid, hard driving songs, and unlistenable loud noises. Vertigo is the best track ...

Thank you all for the kind comments. Lack of punctuation was careless of me, thanks for pointing it out. Now, I'd like to know what I ought to fix here. ...

Much as I love short, descriptive poems, I have to concur- you haven't given us quite enough at the end. But you're pretty close. As they told me, In contrast ...

A compendium of good last-lines for poems is not, in itself, a particularly good poem. What is left unsaid are the circumstances- why are you unhappy? Why is the world ...

Not bad by any stretch, but there's work to be done. Comments in the spoiler. every time I gazed into your eyes I melted tiny jolts rushed through out my ...

Of course! You feel like soft cotton with an iron tip. Let's use this image as an example. Poems are about saying a lot with a little- really really good ...

There's effort here, but just not enough. Before you even tackle the issue of the misfit last line, (Pgs is right, by the way- it's an awkward phrase)you've got to ...

It's a very common angle to work on, and yeah you DO have to make it your own . But there's hope because the poem itself was not a total ...

Prayer Flags at Nam-Tso Lake A roll of prayer flags is never alone, as it reaches across a gorge or winds between jutting rocks. There are always other strings, who ...

The title is interesting, I just wish it made more sense with the poem. Edits under spoiler. I burned the world, with a box of matches. And I laughed all ...

You clearly have enough ability to make this work, but there is quite a bit of polishing to be done. See spoiler. Each step lingered on the broken road, as ...

The effort is there, but all I got out of this poem was an incomprehensible rhyme scheme, and a collection of tried and true imagery. There's probably too much that ...

You can't use wikipedia as a citation for a formal paper because it can be manipulated. That said, deliberate manipulation on wikipedia is rare, and quickly erased on highly trafficked ...