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This is really very good, one of those rare stream-of-conscience pieces that just flows... . it certainly deserved more then the tepid (one post) reception is seems to have gotten. ...

I really did like this, for the most part* your description was supurb. Also the way you broke it up really developed suspence. In terms of putting the reader in ...

Thanks a lot for the comments. Especially Fandilocks comment about using one of them as computer wallpaper. I am very honored. Also I was grateful for the comments on the ...

Check, Mate: Episode 2

(to the above post:) Well, it is a radio play... I have to commend you on the believability of the dialouge. Very little seems forced, it doesn't seem like you ...

This is marked improvement from the first skit. The first I found a little difficult to follow, a little too predictable. But I liked this one quite a bit because ...

These are the best of the photos I took over the summer in Tibet. I didn't have a top notch camera (which I regret), but I think they came out ...

Has anyone mentioned that the format was very very confusing? Oh wait... Please, all that needs to happen is spaces inserted between the lines. But for me, as someone who ...

No rhyme needed, but rhythm couldn't hurt. But aside from that, I think this is a very good poem. There are some lines that stick with me; "smiling painted smiles ...

I've said this many times - just because a poem or song may not make sense or the reader cannot decipher the meaning doesn't make it a bad poem. Sometimes ...

This was well written, and not the normal fare. Let me start with a couple small technical problems I saw: + In the first sentance you use the word "shelf" ...

You wrote a memorable story I think, not one I will forget easily. So good work on that. The description was fine as well, your writing did not look manufactured ...

Writing honestly, I've read this five straight times and I still have no clue what you are trying to say. I mean it all sounds great, and some of the ...

Love may be a cliche, and so is this poem.... But thats not to say that this work is not well put together, I do like the imagery, I think ...