smorgishborg

This was really fun to read, I enjoyed the concept and the presentation very much. I actually think that this doesn't really need additional parts. It stands on it's own ...

Happy Birthday! Out of my printer should come: A cake.

Time travel is pretty complex stuff

Oh god no! I can think of no worse torture then that. I mean, it is so easy to cause physical pain but I credit you, Icaruss with coming up ...

Well, you clearly have a story going. You got around to it, but I think you just hooked the audience for the next episode. But just barely. I would first ...

Oh lordy. The fencing season has begun once again for my team. Another year of futility... But there is a glimmer of hope. The fantastic foilists, fresh off a season ...

"Little Match Girl" anyone? I liked your phrasing quite a bit. The way you started small in scope and slowly panned out until we could see the whole picture was ...

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Mercifully short. Lets start from a wide perspective and hone in. This topic has been shot, strangled, poisoned, drawn and quartered... To really make a point about this, it behooves ...

I really enjoyed this, as was mentioned the POV is really what makes this story. + I was a little nervous when you (the crutch/he?/she?) began to talk about the ...

I'll take a stab (pun not intended) at this one. I think you didn't appear to have any lack of writing talent, but your structure was a little sloppy and ...

So it turns out I randomly write very good fiction once in a while. Enjoy? I did enjoy. You did very well with this, the writing was great, and it ...

Yeah, this was really supurb up until the last line. The dialouge was very believable and really was exactly was you would want to hear. Even, better, I really saw ...

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