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I like it! :D I was a little confused, with the ending, but i think i've straightened it out. It's just that Love never explicitly stated that the boyfriend would ...

how about this: my gag reflex is taking over because this poem sucks. i think that you should burn it; and you will, with any luck. all the besties, ~abby~ ...

Fantastic shots, I love all of them. 1. I hesitate to classify this "coffee book fare", but it seems like you almost tried too hard. It is very nice though, ...

Points for trying, but I'm going to agree with Incandescence. Didn't quite work. Without dispute, the poem was born out of a gimmick. It isn't a particularly engaging topic otherwise. ...

Let's make a deal. I'll come back, edit this post, and crit this, provided that you go back and proofread. The spelling, capitalization, and grammar is terrible. Proofread ladies and ...

Pick a new genre. Seriously, Tolkien was ruined fantasy for the forseeable furture. What it sounds like you need to do is write something different. I personally would chose Romance ...

You know what I read a lot? Depressing stories. Some authors seem to think that writing about something serious qualifies them as a sophisticated writer. So often (this spans way ...

I never try to get involved in one of these discussions. *holds nose and plunges in* I'm going to try to be of help to Ayra, instead of mindlessly arguing ...

Most likely to be a janitor: Saint Razorblade Oh woops! I wasn't supposed to say that was I? :D YWS Clown: Aet Lindling Most spirited: Sumi Most chatty: Lindsay Most ...

I'm curious, Nate, if you think that the growth as you outlined up untill 2009 will be bad for the site. On some poetry forums, works get shuffled down very ...

*hands in five* Jackie Lawton’s Tower by Icaruss Pyro Maniac by PurpleInk The Wise Men by TheEccentricScribe The gift by Maki-Chan Alone: Act 1 by spiritblackwolf2705

Well... it was short and profane. Thats what I got out of it. I'd really lengthen the scenes, you'll give your audience nausea if you keep switching locations so often. ...

You're right... about life I mean. But do you really have to say it the way you say it? It feels like you wrote a sentance and then made it ...

The wise men had it coming. But seriously, I enjoyed your story. The writing wasn't really important, so I won't pay much attention that. This was a fable, something that ...

I'm not so sure about this. I had to restart several times, because you kept losing me, and this isn't to great. And once I finished I didn't really have ...